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Post by issathehumanslayer on Apr 26, 2009 10:40:08 GMT -6
Name: Swiftwind
Age: 25
Alliance: FireGroup
Rank: Flyer
Gender: female
Appearance: Swiftwind is small rather skinny. She has large wings that can propel her faster than any other dragon. She is a dark brown with black and dull red spots, and her wings are traced with grey and black. Her eyes are green, and her claws are dull silver color. Her tail is long, and she uses it to make sharp turns.
Personality: Swiftwind loves to fly in the clouds. She often is out all day, flying with eagles. She likes to see how fast she can go. She easly blends in with rocks, and so she uses that to play kind-hearted jokes on other dragons. Swift-wind is a loving dragon, who dislikes to hurt others. She is rarely cruel. Her hope is to become a seinior, so she works hard to do that.
History: Swiftwind's egg was really large a sandy color. Her mother said that she would be a flyer, and she was right. Dragons expected Swiftwind to be a large dragon and were surprised at her tiny size. Swiftwinds father died before she was born. Her mother died soon after Swiftwings hatching. SHe grew up alone, and flying was the only thing she was good at for a long time. No one even thouth that Swiftwing would not become a flyer.
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Post by Stealthy on Apr 26, 2009 10:43:32 GMT -6
Not bad, but only a few mistakes.
First off, FireGroups territory is black and red, so a brown dragon wouldn't blend in that much. Secondly, dragons don't grow wings until halfway through Fledgling stage, so she couldn't fly to her mother when she was born.
Fix this and I shall happily accept this.
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Post by issathehumanslayer on Apr 26, 2009 17:48:22 GMT -6
I fixed it!
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Post by Stealthy on Apr 27, 2009 11:04:24 GMT -6
AcCePtEd!
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